Guest JordanRiver Posted September 26, 2013 Share Posted September 26, 2013 The Story Of YOU And I The story of US is like a fantasy A mirage of some sorts In the desert I love the way YOU'RE loving me YOU'VE cast a spell on me I love the way YOU make me feel From zero to a hundred YOU take me We're high So high on cloud 9 With no plans of ever coming down YOU and I a mystery Getting closer And closer YOU kiss me I wanna dance I want to scream I want it to be YOU and I for all eternity Sing for me Make me believe Play some music Like I'm the only girl YOU see I've loved YOU for so long Can't believe I'm in YOUR arms Whisper sweet nothings to me Hold me tight I feel YOUR ecstasy YOU'VE swept me away There's nothing left to say Take me higher Far, far away. PS. I think this poem is a good start. If I play with the words and rearrange some of the rhythms and rhymes, it has potential. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RankStranger Posted September 26, 2013 Share Posted September 26, 2013 Does God the Father hang out with you too? In a fatherly manner? I've always wondered what's the nature of the Holy Spirit though. I mean you got a father and a son- where does this ghost fit in? I suppose Mary is the mother-figger in the situation. Is the Holy Ghost kinda like the weird uncle of the family? Does he ever try to 'touch' you? I've known lots of christians to be 'touched' by the Holy Spirit. They seemed happy enough about it- I guess the HS told them they were special or some shit. But I always thought it was creepy. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MerryG Posted September 26, 2013 Share Posted September 26, 2013 I once read a great old satire called "How to Become a Bishop without Being Religious." In that book, the author advised ambitious ministers to (among other things) play lots of hymns featuring the words "me" and "I" to stroke congregants' egos and give them the illusion that Jesus and God were their special friends. He noted that the "greatest" hymn of all time for self-advancement was "In the Garden" -- not only because it sets some sort of record for "me" and "I" in a song allegedly about God, but because it actually implies that God has a cozy, exclusive, romantic interest in the person doing the singing ("He walks with me and he talks with me; he tells me I am his own; and the joy we share as we tarry there, none other has ever known.") JordanRiver has put "In the Garden" in the shade! Walks in the garden? Fergeddaboutit! Now we have make-out sessions with a deity! Now God's on the point of orgasm ("I feel YOUR ecstasy") with the one-and-only woman he loves. Wow. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
par4dcourse Posted September 26, 2013 Share Posted September 26, 2013 Pour it back in. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Moderator florduh Posted September 26, 2013 Super Moderator Share Posted September 26, 2013 Troll. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Galien Posted September 26, 2013 Share Posted September 26, 2013 The Story Of YOU And I The story of US is like a fantasy A mirage of some sorts In the desert I love the way YOU'RE loving me YOU'VE cast a spell on me I love the way YOU make me feel From zero to a hundred YOU take me We're high So high on cloud 9 With no plans of ever coming down YOU and I a mystery Getting closer And closer YOU kiss me I wanna dance I want to scream I want it to be YOU and I for all eternity Sing for me Make me believe Play some music Like I'm the only girl YOU see I've loved YOU for so long Can't believe I'm in YOUR arms Whisper sweet nothings to me Hold me tight I feel YOUR ecstasy YOU'VE swept me away There's nothing left to say Take me higher Far, far away. PS. I think this poem is a good start. If I play with the words and rearrange some of the rhythms and rhymes, it has potential. Looks like someone is very scared of real life. Can't blame them really. It's a jungle out there. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JordanRiver Posted September 26, 2013 Share Posted September 26, 2013 Wow harsh critics..tough crowd. Did I mention I typed it out automatically. I will try to work on it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Galien Posted September 26, 2013 Share Posted September 26, 2013 Wow harsh critics..tough crowd. Did I mention I typed it out automatically. I will try to work on it. You won't find harsher critics. you do realise we have been where you are but have grown up and moved on. This is all a bit of a yawn for most of us, except for the few it makes slightly homicidal. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mymistake Posted September 26, 2013 Share Posted September 26, 2013 No amount of work is going to make us interested in Sex-With-Jesus. You cannot polish that turd. 3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JordanRiver Posted September 26, 2013 Share Posted September 26, 2013 Wow harsh critics..tough crowd. Did I mention I typed it out automatically. I will try to work on it. You won't find harsher critics. you do realise we have been where you are but have grown up and moved on. This is all a bit of a yawn for most of us, except for the few it makes slightly homicidal. I do not think so. I think some here had a real relationship with Jesus, but for whatever reason do not now. I could have gone that path too...but didn't. There was a fork in the road...some went left...I went right. That's a big difference. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JordanRiver Posted September 26, 2013 Share Posted September 26, 2013 Some won't finish the work that was started in them. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Moderator florduh Posted September 26, 2013 Super Moderator Share Posted September 26, 2013 Some won't finish the work that was started in them. And some are just fucking nuts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JordanRiver Posted September 26, 2013 Share Posted September 26, 2013 Then again if someone hates Jesus or His ways...why should they spend eternity with Him. Jesus wants a bride that is ready for Him....not dragging her feet and disagreeing with Him Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mymistake Posted September 26, 2013 Share Posted September 26, 2013 Say aren't post 10, 11 and 13 the kind of talk that is suppose to be confined to the Lion's Den? What is it doing stinking up the Creative Works section? 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Moderator buffettphan Posted September 27, 2013 Super Moderator Share Posted September 27, 2013 JR, you are (?getting awfully close to?) proselytizing and christians are confined to the lion's den for that kinda shit. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Moderator buffettphan Posted September 27, 2013 Super Moderator Share Posted September 27, 2013 Say aren't post 10, 11 and 13 the kind of talk that is suppose to be confined to the Lion's Den? What is it doing stinking up the Creative Works section? Oh, sorry mm....I posted before reading your post! Knowing his/her history here, I cringed just reading the OP in this section. Hope if anyone is lurking, they realize h/she is just a weeeeee bit nutty. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JordanRiver Posted September 27, 2013 Share Posted September 27, 2013 I agree.... I will try to remember that here I'm not the preaching type. Don't worry. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mymistake Posted September 27, 2013 Share Posted September 27, 2013 Been preaching ever since you got here. If you are not the preaching type then when are you going to stop? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Galien Posted September 27, 2013 Share Posted September 27, 2013 Then again if someone hates Jesus or His ways...why should they spend eternity with Him. Jesus wants a bride that is ready for Him....not dragging her feet and disagreeing with Him Jesus isnt real honey. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JordanRiver Posted September 27, 2013 Share Posted September 27, 2013 MyMistake... Go ahead and take that back. I express my love and devotion to Jesus. I am not preaching the Bible and you know it Now on your knees and beg for my forgiveness.... I don't think I have mentioned a scripture here like ever. I disagree with you whole-heartedly Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mymistake Posted September 27, 2013 Share Posted September 27, 2013 MyMistake... Go ahead and take that back. I express my love and devotion to Jesus. I am not preaching the Bible and you know it Now on your knees and beg for my forgiveness.... I don't think I have mentioned a scripture here like ever. I disagree with you whole-heartedly I didn't say you were preaching the Bible. I said you were preaching. Like all Christians you have your own private interpretation where you choose what you want from Christianity and you ignore the rest. We all did it when we were Christians. You are no different. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JordanRiver Posted September 27, 2013 Share Posted September 27, 2013 Well that is just a part of who I am. I cannot change that. Nor do I want to. I want to be like Jesus. Soooo...there will always be an element of a "preacher" in every Christian since we are told to go out and make disciples etc. But you have to admit it to me just once, that I have been good about NOT writing any scriptures. No one is perfect. I said I will TRY. Relax Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Galien Posted September 27, 2013 Share Posted September 27, 2013 Well that is just a part of who I am. I cannot change that. Nor do I want to. I want to be like Jesus. Soooo...there will always be an element of a "preacher" in every Christian since we are told to go out and make disciples etc. But you have to admit it me just once, that I have been good and NOT written any scriptures. No one is perfect. MM is perfect. You will learn this. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Galien Posted September 27, 2013 Share Posted September 27, 2013 Well that is just a part of who I am. I cannot change that. Nor do I want to. I want to be like Jesus. Soooo...there will always be an element of a "preacher" in every Christian since we are told to go out and make disciples etc. But you have to admit it to me just once, that I have been good about NOT writing any scriptures. No one is perfect. I said I will TRY. Relax You want to be lilke jesus. I mean I onlyhave what is written in the bible to go on, and i have no idea where that shit came from anyway but in 36 years as a christian i met like 3 people who appeared to be anything like jesus. the rest of christians were just like any other asshole, but worse, because they mistakenly believe they are better. at least here in australia we dont have to put up with their constant bullshit. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JordanRiver Posted September 27, 2013 Share Posted September 27, 2013 He rubs me the wrong way.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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