Flyby Stardancer Posted February 12, 2007 Share Posted February 12, 2007 I have intro to writing poetry every Tues/Thurs afternoon, and it's a workshop class where we submit poems and the rest of the class critiques them. Well, we passed around our second round of poems last Thursday, to start critiquing tomorrow. I'm really worried about how the poem I submitted for this round will be recieved, though. When I wrote it, it came out as being very in-your-face anti-Chriatian, a lot more so than how my own personal opinions run. I still submitted it because it was the best poem I had written since we submitted the first round of poems, and I trust my classmates to be mature in handling it. ...So why the heck am I still so worried about it?! I bet none of the people who submitted religious-themed poems the first round ever worried about offending non-Christians in the class... And I have a good class... But yet I'm still worrying myself over it! ...Luckily I won't have to wait long. My poem ended up being second on the list, thus will be critiqued during class tomorrow for sure... But I still have knots in my stomach over it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fweethawt Posted February 12, 2007 Share Posted February 12, 2007 Your worry stems from the fact that you've turned your back on Jesus. Let us know how it goes. Sounds interesting. It would be nice to read the poem, too. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HuaiDan Posted February 12, 2007 Share Posted February 12, 2007 I wanna see the poem too! You shoulda written an anti-islam poem. That would have gone over well. Besta' luck. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vixentrox Posted February 12, 2007 Share Posted February 12, 2007 Yes, fess up. let's see your masterpiece! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flyby Stardancer Posted February 12, 2007 Author Share Posted February 12, 2007 I'm not sure if we're allowed to post anything submitted to class online without the prof's permission, but since you all seem to want to see it... "Unconditional Conditionals" Christian soldiers marching on the next Crusade for the new Holy Land. A dead forest of white covering the land; Each tree the same, only two branches. God blessed us, God smited us, Raise the rally cry! Ghostly enemies everywhere, As real as drugged illusions; crossed jewelry everywhere. Where are the decent folk? Good Father, hurt me, bleed me for in being myself I have lost Your love. Show me my wrongs with a switch. Merciful Father, make me cry; My tears are Your forgiveness. All men are free so long as they believe in You. The quiet ones hide away, Just doing as they are told; Truly sheep to be herded. Blind ones speak louder to be seen. How can love exist in so much hate? I speak but have no voice: Their emotions overrule my logic. They don’t want it to be, so it can’t be the truth of life. Wrapped in their security blanket, Unknowing of the beauty of things unconditional. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fweethawt Posted February 12, 2007 Share Posted February 12, 2007 Oh, you're gonna get fucked up... Actually, I would be surprised if any believers would even catch the overall gist of the poem. I liked it myself. I liked it very much. This is my favorite line ----> "Blind ones speak louder to be seen." Good luck with this. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Piprus Posted February 12, 2007 Share Posted February 12, 2007 Wow, Flyby, that's a powerful piece of writing...I enjoyed that, but I will have to re-read it several times of course to get the full effect. (Poetry and literature aren't a strong suit with me). As to any flack from it, hey...don't fret over that 'til it happens, if it ever does. Who knows? I wonder...did Whitman or Byron ever do any hand wringing over something they had written? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flyby Stardancer Posted February 12, 2007 Author Share Posted February 12, 2007 Oh, you're gonna get fucked up... Gee, thanks. Actually, I would be surprised if any believers would even catch the overall gist of the poem. I liked it myself. I liked it very much. This is my favorite line ----> "Blind ones speak louder to be seen." Good luck with this. Well, some of the students in my class are very perceptive when it comes to the poems, including one of the ones that wrote one of the religous poems in the first round. Thanks! I happen to like that line too. Wow, Flyby, that's a powerful piece of writing...I enjoyed that, but I will have to re-read it several times of course to get the full effect. (Poetry and literature aren't a strong suit with me).As to any flack from it, hey...don't fret over that 'til it happens, if it ever does. Who knows? I wonder...did Whitman or Byron ever do any hand wringing over something they had written? It's a heck of a lot better than the poem I wrote for the first round of critiques. And I know I shouldn't worry about it...but I do. My mom's trained being a worry-wort into me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vixentrox Posted February 13, 2007 Share Posted February 13, 2007 I liked it though I'm hardly qualified to be a poetic critiquer. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flyby Stardancer Posted February 13, 2007 Author Share Posted February 13, 2007 And you're also an Ex-C member, much more likely to get it and not get riled up by it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dave Posted February 13, 2007 Share Posted February 13, 2007 That was a very nice poem. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flyby Stardancer Posted February 13, 2007 Author Share Posted February 13, 2007 Thanks! ...Only about two hours now until I find out their reactions... *nervous!* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flyby Stardancer Posted February 13, 2007 Author Share Posted February 13, 2007 Back! And it didn't go as bad as I were fearing. They all handled it quite maturely (except I have no clue about those who didn't speak up during class, and I haven't read all the responses yet). Some of them got the gist of what I was trying to say, others were a bit off base. Overall though, it was a bigger success than my last poem. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amethyst Posted February 13, 2007 Share Posted February 13, 2007 I thought that was an excellent poem. IMO, the best art makes you think. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flyby Stardancer Posted February 14, 2007 Author Share Posted February 14, 2007 I was really happy with it... ...Then I read all the pages of critiques. ARGH. They all conflict with one another and so many didn't get it... And I have no idea which ones didn't get it because their minds couldn't allow for the possibility, or if they didn't get it just because it wasn't clear. ..And one of the people I was most worried about being angry over the poem? She got it and liked the poem. Go figure. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BlueGiant Posted February 14, 2007 Share Posted February 14, 2007 Have to say that this seems to be the kind of poem that has to be heard, very forceful. I like it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HuaiDan Posted February 14, 2007 Share Posted February 14, 2007 Why not post that on the exchristian.net home page? Good work. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amethyst Posted February 14, 2007 Share Posted February 14, 2007 I was really happy with it... ...Then I read all the pages of critiques. ARGH. They all conflict with one another and so many didn't get it... And I have no idea which ones didn't get it because their minds couldn't allow for the possibility, or if they didn't get it just because it wasn't clear. ..And one of the people I was most worried about being angry over the poem? She got it and liked the poem. Go figure. I know it's hard, but try not to worry about what they think. It's not your fault they don't get it. People have a tendency to misinterpret things, especially if they do not want to interpret it in the correct way. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flyby Stardancer Posted February 15, 2007 Author Share Posted February 15, 2007 The problem is that I can't tell what the reason is that they're misinterpretting it... Thus, I don't know whose critiques I should give most weight to... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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